The Only "Hallmark" Poem I Ever Wrote

[kiwidoc]

Fear not dear ones. The dirty dog is still an unmitigated swine. Fancy telling all of you that I called his poetry adolescent angst.
The cad -

I NEVER SAID THAT!!!

Actually RD these are pretty good. I especially like the first ones, as I am a fan of understated poetry with a lot of repitition.

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[Grand-Ranger]

Rudedawg! I am telling you man, Dual to a bard!

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So if in the forest look behind you, because that where the ranger is going to be

[Waluin]

Originally posted by Cloudbringer: I LOVE Tennyson's The Lady of Shallott!

CB, you just scored points with me

But Lancelot mused a little space;
He said, "She has a lovely face;
God in his mercy lend her grace,
The Lady of Shalott."

[RudeDawg]

Originally posted by kiwidoc: I NEVER SAID THAT!!!

well, it SOUNDS like something you would say...

*OWWWW !! stopit! stopit! that hurts! stopit!*




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The RudeDawg, known in these Forgotten Realms as Perin LightEyes
"Let them come, Let them ALL come."
-"Ender says, 'The enemy is down.' "

Actually RD these are pretty good. I especially like the first ones, as I am a fan of understated poetry with a lot of repitition. [/b]

That's RD! Excellent writeing ,A1!...your bringing out the best in everyone! Well, I think thats what it meant???Wait...repitition Doc?


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[RudeDawg]

Originally posted by Grand-Ranger: Rudedawg! I am telling you man, Dual to a bard!

*SMACK* Lightly smacks Grand-Ranger on the head...

Rangers ONLY dual to Cleric, and rarely if that...

and never, NEVER to a *shiver* bard...

Besides, YOU are the musician between us two...

for that insolent remark, you get "clean-up" duty.... the moose pooped behind the Ranger Cabin in Umar Hills...

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The RudeDawg, known in these Forgotten Realms as Perin LightEyes
"Let them come, Let them ALL come."
-"Ender says, 'The enemy is down.' "

[Melusine]

Originally posted by Waluin: CB, you just scored points with me But Lancelot mused a little space; He said, "She has a lovely face; God in his mercy lend her grace, The Lady of Shalott."

Cloudypie...I knew you did, so I have asked him before if I could email it to you and he agreed... but that would be unfair, I want to post it here for all to read
Waluin, he actually used that quote in his story!
Great to see another Tennyson lover
I'll sing for him Cloudy if you think that will make a difference (Seb will probably be thinking more along the lines of a striptease I guess )
Oh well, I'll get him to give in yet...

Persuasive elf



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Melusine, High Queen of Fluffies, Archbabe of the OHF, the LH,
the HADB and the SPAE(Society for the
Prevention of Acronym Extinction) &
Official Entertainer Elf of the BG2 Bar

Your voice is ambrosia

[Sigmar]

Well what do you know, Mr big tough ranger is turning into a tree hugging hippy. It had to happen eventualy, all that nature Good poem(coughhippycough).


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"So why should I worship you Tiax?"
"Well Sigmar, I am Tiax the chosen one of Cyric, destined to ascend, I shall rule all!"
"Do you know you have a duck on your head?"
"Duck what duck......ahhhhhhhh!"

Tiax, warmaster of clan HADB

[Waluin]

Originally posted by Melusine: Waluin, he actually used that quote in his story! Great to see another Tennyson lover (Seb will probably be thinking more along the lines of a striptease I guess )

heh, cool! Sounds like an excellent story.

Striptease, I'm all for that! *dodges getting slapped*

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[kiwidoc]

Originally posted by kiwidoc: Actually RD these are pretty good. I especially like the first ones, as I am a fan of understated poetry with a lot of repitition.

To clarify - by repetition I mean use of a line or a phrase repeated within a poem to add symmetry and continuity to it, and also to strengthen its emotive power. Used clumsily it is trite, cliched and can kill a piece. However used skillfully , like Rudy did in his first poem, it is very effective.

I wrote this tonight, with a lot of help from RD who has been really good at getting me to write, encouraging me as I do and helping me with the rewrites. Thanks Muttly, you are a star and I OWE you
As you can see I use repitition as one of the strongest tools in this poem.

The Dance

Silently they sit and shyly watch
The shadows waver on the white washed walls.
Shadows dance like moths around the
Flicker of the fragrant candle flame.
Slowly drawing ever closer to
The lure of lovely light and warmth
And the certainty of fire
That will burn away their wings
To wisps of silver ash
Blown away upon the gentle winds.

Nervously they sit and softly talk
Words that weave a pattern in the scented air
Words that dance around the brightness of
Their fragile hopes of light and love
Slowly drawing ever closer to
The lure of loving, and of warmth
And the possibility of fire
That will burn away their hearts
To wisps of silver ash
Blown away upon the gentle winds.

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