Fragments of Humanity, Sanctuary II - Page 11

Bahamut · 07-22-2001, 11:49 AM

Umm sweetie, it sounds soo Dreamy... great poem Lioness! good! keep 'em comin!!!

Yep Jerome.. at least I stepped it up a notch...

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Yukishiro Tomoe

Lioness · 07-22-2001, 12:52 PM

thanx!

kinda, J'rome...I thought the river could symbolize your life, with turnings and divides, ya know, is that what you meant?

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Jerome · 07-22-2001, 12:57 PM

I saw the "river in your backyard" to be symbolic for a persons childhood (ie, the *back*yard being behind them and so forth...) and the "Sea" being adult life..... the twists and turns all being part of the rugged course we stuggle against to reach adulthood.

Thats how *I* perceived it, and i have to say that it's a very wise and insightful piece of writing

WELL DONE!

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Lioness · 07-22-2001, 12:59 PM

Thanx...I see what you mean.

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Jerome · 07-22-2001, 01:02 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Lioness:
Thanx...I see what you mean.

Bear in mind that I AM a derranged scottish youth.....and the effects of the Scottish drinking water haven't been to kind to my poor brain

. Take anything i say with a pinch of salt

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kiwidoc · 07-22-2001, 08:53 PM

Can I be an absolute bloody harridan and ask you not to make lots of back and forth posts on this thread. I really love to read other peoples work here, and to share serious and helpful comments. Some of these poems are deeply personal and not that easy to share, so if the thread gets clogged up with spam and jokes it strikes me as just a bit ... ummmm ... not nice?????

Gridlock - your poem was very impressive, and rather moving. I love the images you call up - the language of the trees. It is a very sensual poem in that it conjures many physical as well as emotional sensations. If it was mine - I would have called it "I wonder" as the whole poem is about the sense of wonder that sometimes washes over us.

Djinn - i am intrigued. Message me on MH with the story behind that pretty please.

Nothing new from me - life has just been a bit too raw to even think about putting it dwon on paper

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Grand-Ranger · 07-22-2001, 09:37 PM

Wow all these poems are inspiring.

Mind If I right a couple of lines? I have about 30 or so songs written...but much to violent to post here.

Dawn to Dusk:

All the world too see, all the people to meet. I dont want it, but I dont want this either.

Confuesion, always losing, fighting a battle I cant win.

Dont ask me how to win the world over, dont ask me how to find a four leaf clover. I dont know.

Another one is gone, another one is here, people are so happy, and people are full of fear.

That was just a couple of verses from one of my songs I left alot out though

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So if in the forest look behind you, because that where the ranger is going to be

Bahamut · 07-23-2001, 05:29 AM

Simple GR, and iit is striking... but it will not strike me as well as it should if you say this is a song. I should hear it someday

I was about to do that kiwi, thanx for taking it to your own hands...

Gridlock is a good poet, and she's my friend!

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Yukishiro Tomoe

Bahamut · 07-23-2001, 09:53 AM

Trying to make an impromptu here...

PAPERCUT

Paper can cut
And when it does
It hurts like a cutter
Splitting your skin open

The swiftness and the sharpness
Of the paper's side
And the pain it provides
For all concerned

You ache
But there is nothing to show it
You bleed
And blood doesn't show itself

The skin, open
Air attacks the the space- small and clean
Making you feel
Uneasy and unreal

For the wound, cut open, doesn't bleed.

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Yukishiro Tomoe

Djinn Raffo · 07-23-2001, 05:23 PM

Bahamut...

That was awesome!
I really like that one.

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07-22-2001, 11:49 AM	#101
Bahamut Iron Throne Cult Join Date: March 12, 2001 Location: Manila, Philippines Age: 39 Posts: 4,864	Umm sweetie, it sounds soo Dreamy... great poem Lioness! good! keep 'em comin!!! Yep Jerome.. at least I stepped it up a notch... ------------------ Yukishiro Tomoe

07-22-2001, 12:52 PM	#102
Lioness Jack Burton Join Date: June 3, 2001 Location: Among the Stars Age: 36 Posts: 5,837	thanx! kinda, J'rome...I thought the river could symbolize your life, with turnings and divides, ya know, is that what you meant? ------------------ Official teaser and ranger of the HADB Clan Waitress and entertainer at Cloudy's Cafe in GD

07-22-2001, 12:57 PM	#103
Jerome Knight of the Rose Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Scotland Age: 38 Posts: 4,418	I saw the "river in your backyard" to be symbolic for a persons childhood (ie, the backyard being behind them and so forth...) and the "Sea" being adult life..... the twists and turns all being part of the rugged course we stuggle against to reach adulthood. Thats how I perceived it, and i have to say that it's a very wise and insightful piece of writing WELL DONE! ------------------

07-22-2001, 12:59 PM	#104
Lioness Jack Burton Join Date: June 3, 2001 Location: Among the Stars Age: 36 Posts: 5,837	Thanx...I see what you mean. ------------------ Official teaser and ranger of the HADB Clan Waitress and entertainer at Cloudy's Cafe in GD

07-22-2001, 08:53 PM	#106
kiwidoc Zhentarim Guard Join Date: May 31, 2001 Location: UK Posts: 385	Can I be an absolute bloody harridan and ask you not to make lots of back and forth posts on this thread. I really love to read other peoples work here, and to share serious and helpful comments. Some of these poems are deeply personal and not that easy to share, so if the thread gets clogged up with spam and jokes it strikes me as just a bit ... ummmm ... not nice????? Gridlock - your poem was very impressive, and rather moving. I love the images you call up - the language of the trees. It is a very sensual poem in that it conjures many physical as well as emotional sensations. If it was mine - I would have called it "I wonder" as the whole poem is about the sense of wonder that sometimes washes over us. Djinn - i am intrigued. Message me on MH with the story behind that pretty please. Nothing new from me - life has just been a bit too raw to even think about putting it dwon on paper ------------------ There is only one kiwidoc, accept no substitutes STANDARD OPERATING PROCEEDURE www.judyhope.co.uk THE ABYSS - FREE FORM ROLEPLAYING http://pub76.ezboard.com/btheabyss40673

07-22-2001, 09:37 PM	#107
Grand-Ranger Galvatron Join Date: March 29, 2001 Location: Everywhere I wanna go its already where I am,cause I am already there Posts: 2,130	Wow all these poems are inspiring. Mind If I right a couple of lines? I have about 30 or so songs written...but much to violent to post here. Dawn to Dusk: All the world too see, all the people to meet. I dont want it, but I dont want this either. Confuesion, always losing, fighting a battle I cant win. Dont ask me how to win the world over, dont ask me how to find a four leaf clover. I dont know. Another one is gone, another one is here, people are so happy, and people are full of fear. That was just a couple of verses from one of my songs I left alot out though ------------------ So if in the forest look behind you, because that where the ranger is going to be

07-23-2001, 05:29 AM	#108
Bahamut Iron Throne Cult Join Date: March 12, 2001 Location: Manila, Philippines Age: 39 Posts: 4,864	Simple GR, and iit is striking... but it will not strike me as well as it should if you say this is a song. I should hear it someday I was about to do that kiwi, thanx for taking it to your own hands... Gridlock is a good poet, and she's my friend! ------------------ Yukishiro Tomoe

07-23-2001, 09:53 AM	#109
Bahamut Iron Throne Cult Join Date: March 12, 2001 Location: Manila, Philippines Age: 39 Posts: 4,864	Trying to make an impromptu here... PAPERCUT Paper can cut And when it does It hurts like a cutter Splitting your skin open The swiftness and the sharpness Of the paper's side And the pain it provides For all concerned You ache But there is nothing to show it You bleed And blood doesn't show itself The skin, open Air attacks the the space- small and clean Making you feel Uneasy and unreal For the wound, cut open, doesn't bleed. ------------------ Yukishiro Tomoe

07-23-2001, 05:23 PM	#110
Djinn Raffo Ra Join Date: March 11, 2001 Location: Ant Hill Age: 49 Posts: 2,397	Bahamut... That was awesome! I really like that one.

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