12-04-2001, 04:28 PM | #11 |
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quote: Jerome, of course! I proofread all my boyfriend's essays for his masters in English Lit so it's no problem at all! [img]smile.gif[/img] Just send me the story in a Word doc! The address is the_new_helen@hotmail.com I'd love to help out as this is one of the few stories I've read here that really impressed me [img]smile.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]
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12-04-2001, 04:53 PM | #12 |
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quote: Thanks Mel, I owe you. [img]smile.gif[/img]
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12-04-2001, 05:35 PM | #13 |
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Very good Jerome. Your description of the weather and the schools in Scotland was great. While I was reading the start of it I was thinking about the weather yesterday night. It was exactly how you described it. I dinna quite bide in Glasgee, I bide near Aberdeen. No jokes about sheep .
I wasn't expecting the ending it was very dramatic. You definitely have a career as a writer a head of you if you keep the good idea's flowing.
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12-04-2001, 08:33 PM | #14 |
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Good story, and I definitely don't say that often. It was very well constructed and it presented very stong imagery that I feel you used well. I have to say I enjoyed the underlying meaning in the story as well, as the story itself. I don't think any of us view all people as we should. Maybe that's something we should all be a little more subjective about.
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12-05-2001, 04:33 AM | #15 |
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Jerome, I just sent you back the corrected copy yesterday night *yawns and rubs eyes*
Hope it will be of use to you [img]smile.gif[/img]
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12-05-2001, 11:04 AM | #16 |
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quote: LOL, it's a wonderful country to be in, ain't it? Mel: THANK YOU! You're an angel! [img]smile.gif[/img]
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12-05-2001, 03:11 PM | #17 |
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quote: Oh aye just great. Its funny that i only think that when i'm inside. Today it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey.
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12-05-2001, 03:54 PM | #18 |
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quote: I know... Scottish weather is great.... as long as you aren't the poor bugger that has to go out in it. --being made to play football outside in weather like this is just evil..
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12-05-2001, 05:08 PM | #19 |
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quote: Lol, indeed it is very evil. PE teachers seem to like watching frozen peole play football on grass that feels more like rocks. I was really happy that i got a cup of tea while i was out side during my many smoke breaks today. I work across the road from the docks in Aberdeen and that just makes it colder.
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12-05-2001, 05:15 PM | #20 |
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Ach, you don't know Mouse do you? He's another of our embittered Scots clan.... and he comes from Aberdeen too... *tries to withold sheep jokes* [img]tongue.gif[/img]
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