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04-12-2003, 09:11 AM
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Lord Ao
 Join Date: March 3, 2001
Location: London, England
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Because I can't help myself,
my mind, it has no mental wealth, my thoughts are left upon a shelf, to drown, upon the crown of my own unfeeling, the cards that my life's dealing, are jokers.. The pokers.... The merrymakers, the ultimate pisstakers, and all the things that I mistake as.. mates' o' mine, the contact breakers in my mind.. love and hate and love and hate and love and hate and...... My mistakes... Here they are upon a plate, the thirst will not insatiate, my love, my hate, my give, my take, and all the things I love to break, are broken, No words spoken, just a physical token... of a tear, or a word I didn't hear.. and my greatest fear... was to see your tears.. and you said.. this tear is my blood shed, and upon my tears you have fed, filled me with some mental dread, these tears are for words once said.. but no more.. I knew the score.. so I say... these tears rolling down my cheek, are my tears for an outlook bleak, yeah now I reach my mental peaks, of hatred, broken all the things held sacred, to us..and me.. the things I thought were Heaven sent and all the things I ever meant, my truths my lies....all now spent, the lines of love that I've now bent, are out of shape, for good... and love and hate take on a different gait the limp, the skip, the shoot from the hip, the bloody nose and the fat lip, tear me apart, and my heart rips... like paper and things taper.. to a point.. .............. .......... ...... ... . that I can't see... just my memory... taking the piss from me.. because I couldn't see...... all the good cards dealt to me.. I'm in the fire, I'm the prick, the liar, and I'm the comprehensive trier, that failed, and bailed, out.. [ 04-12-2003, 05:17 PM: Message edited by: Charlie ]
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04-12-2003, 09:16 AM
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40th Level Warrior
  Join Date: April 15, 2002
Location: Utrecht The Netherlands
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Great job Charlie, where do you get your inspiration from ?
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04-12-2003, 09:18 AM
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Fzoul Chembryl
 Join Date: July 11, 2002
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lots of feeling, i didn't read it out loud but in my mind it felt as tho it would roll off the tongue well. very fluid. i like it.
[ 04-12-2003, 09:19 AM: Message edited by: RevRuby ]
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04-12-2003, 11:48 AM
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Lord Ao
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Quote:
Tx.
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04-12-2003, 12:17 PM
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 Join Date: January 2, 2003
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Good job Charlie [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]
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04-12-2003, 03:10 PM
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40th Level Warrior
Join Date: March 24, 2002
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That was interesting, nice job Charlie.
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04-12-2003, 06:15 PM
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Jack Burton
 Join Date: March 21, 2001
Location: Philippines, but now Harbor City Sydney
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nice poem.. masterful and inspiring.. haunting and eerie.. the way i see it..
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04-12-2003, 06:18 PM
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Jack Burton
Join Date: March 21, 2001
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nice poem.. masterful and inspiring.. haunting and eerie.. the way i see it..
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04-12-2003, 07:30 PM
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Symbol of Cyric
 Join Date: March 1, 2001
Location: Montana, USA
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Great resonance, Charlie. Evoked alot of echoes..... [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]
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