I Shot A Man Today

Charlie · 03-08-2003, 07:33 AM

I shot a man Today

I shot a man today
A no one, someone out for fun,
said the wrong thing and met my gun,
now he's in the gutter and I'm on the run.

I shot a man today
Straight down in flames,
done nothing wrong but asked some names,
Wish I'd used my head, not lost my brains.

I shot a man today
Where do I go, the plot is lost and there's no show,
the lights and the candles have lost their glow,
the voice in the head says "told you so",
the youth are lost yet they don't know,
their bodies enabled but minds disabled,
thoughts all twisted like an old ships cables,
lost in the search for lie spun fables,
angry faces across dirty tables,
and screams and shouts and shots ringout,
who's the thug, who's the lout,
what's this violence all about,
mental or physical it's all the same,
always looking to pass the blame,
there is no winner in this ■■■■■■■ game,
you and I are just the same...
Just we don't always see it

I shot a man today
No fun, no happiness,
I shot him through my mental uselessness,
uncontrollable compulsiveness,
no prayers, no thoughts.... no goodnight, God bless,
the man was shot because he was a mess.

I shot a man today
because he couldn't see,
the man that I shot today...
.......... was me.

[ 03-21-2003, 06:07 PM: Message edited by: Charlie ]

The Hierophant · 03-08-2003, 07:37 AM

Those are some fantastic lyrics.
Who wrote that?

Charlie · 03-08-2003, 07:41 AM

I did.

wellard · 03-08-2003, 07:47 AM

read it twice charlie. very good. [img]graemlins/awesomework.gif[/img]

The Hierophant · 03-08-2003, 07:47 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Charlie:
I did.

Well Charlie, I'm impressed.
Do you intend these lines to be sung (ie: in a band), or is it more along the lines of poetry? Because they work incredibly well either way [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]

johnny · 03-08-2003, 07:53 AM

Having fun in the pub Charlie ?

Charlie · 03-08-2003, 07:59 AM

well I wrote it a few days ago. Was inspired for some unknown reason. Had to get it written "there and then".

Hierophant....dunno, haven't thought too hard on it. I know I own the copyright to it but haven't thought much. Oddly, I write my poetry with musical lyrics half in my mind....weird no?

Thanks for the words, pleased you like it.

The Hierophant · 03-08-2003, 08:04 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Charlie:
Oddly, I write my poetry with musical lyrics half in my mind....weird no?

Not weird at all. Whatever keeps that creative muse of yours flowing.

Attalus · 03-08-2003, 10:06 AM

I liike it, Charlie. Thanks for sharing. [img]graemlins/awesomework.gif[/img]

/)eathKiller · 03-08-2003, 10:10 AM

man... they aughta' make a poetry/free writing forum so folks like you wont have their stuff bumped around so often... Great stuff [img]tongue.gif[/img]

03-08-2003, 07:37 AM	#2
The Hierophant Thoth - Egyptian God of Wisdom Join Date: May 10, 2002 Location: Dunedin, New Zealand. Age: 43 Posts: 2,860	Those are some fantastic lyrics. Who wrote that? __________________ [img]\"hosted/Hierophant.jpg\" alt=\" - \" /><br />Strewth!

03-08-2003, 07:47 AM	#4
wellard Dracolisk Join Date: November 1, 2002 Location: Australia ..... G\'day! Posts: 6,123	read it twice charlie. very good. [img]graemlins/awesomework.gif[/img] __________________ fossils - natures way of laughing at creationists for over 3 billion years

03-08-2003, 07:53 AM	#6
johnny 40th Level Warrior Join Date: April 15, 2002 Location: Utrecht The Netherlands Age: 59 Posts: 16,981	Having fun in the pub Charlie ? __________________

03-08-2003, 10:06 AM	#9
Attalus Symbol of Bane Join Date: November 26, 2001 Location: Texas Age: 76 Posts: 8,167	I liike it, Charlie. Thanks for sharing. [img]graemlins/awesomework.gif[/img] __________________ Even Heroes sometimes fail...

03-08-2003, 10:10 AM	#10
/)eathKiller Dracolisk Join Date: January 5, 2002 Location: Guantanamo Bay, Cuba Age: 39 Posts: 6,043	man... they aughta' make a poetry/free writing forum so folks like you wont have their stuff bumped around so often... Great stuff [img]tongue.gif[/img] __________________ [img]\"http://membres.lycos.fr/th8or/ZeroSigForIronworks.gif\" alt=\" - \" /> o.o;

03-08-2003, 07:33 AM	#1
Charlie Lord Ao Join Date: March 3, 2001 Location: London, England Age: 31 Posts: 2,023	I shot a man Today I shot a man today A no one, someone out for fun, said the wrong thing and met my gun, now he's in the gutter and I'm on the run. I shot a man today Straight down in flames, done nothing wrong but asked some names, Wish I'd used my head, not lost my brains. I shot a man today Where do I go, the plot is lost and there's no show, the lights and the candles have lost their glow, the voice in the head says "told you so", the youth are lost yet they don't know, their bodies enabled but minds disabled, thoughts all twisted like an old ships cables, lost in the search for lie spun fables, angry faces across dirty tables, and screams and shouts and shots ringout, who's the thug, who's the lout, what's this violence all about, mental or physical it's all the same, always looking to pass the blame, there is no winner in this ■■■■■■■ game, you and I are just the same... Just we don't always see it I shot a man today No fun, no happiness, I shot him through my mental uselessness, uncontrollable compulsiveness, no prayers, no thoughts.... no goodnight, God bless, the man was shot because he was a mess. I shot a man today because he couldn't see, the man that I shot today... .......... was me. [ 03-21-2003, 06:07 PM: Message edited by: Charlie ]

03-08-2003, 07:41 AM	#3
Charlie Lord Ao Join Date: March 3, 2001 Location: London, England Age: 31 Posts: 2,023	I did.

03-08-2003, 07:59 AM	#7
Charlie Lord Ao Join Date: March 3, 2001 Location: London, England Age: 31 Posts: 2,023	well I wrote it a few days ago. Was inspired for some unknown reason. Had to get it written "there and then". Hierophant....dunno, haven't thought too hard on it. I know I own the copyright to it but haven't thought much. Oddly, I write my poetry with musical lyrics half in my mind....weird no? Thanks for the words, pleased you like it.

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