Poems!

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Our easy conversation passed
through the chaos like a pick-pocket.
Her clean features glowing like white wine.

Over in a unlit corner
with his friends all draining beers,
her husband, laughing mouth ready to pinch a Marlboro.
Two weeks a father
he slouched faultlessly on a rumpled sofa
all the way across that dark paneled basement
from his wife. His son
left at grandmas in small abandonment.

He brought himself over to us
for cigarettes.
Not to rub her arms with his thin hands
and not to notice me.
He was thin in his manner
and thin in his speach
and took the fresh pack peeling
the cellephane with two flits
of a practiced wrist and let fall to the floor
his thin love
with a sobering crinkle.

I drove away on icy roads
having seen their treadless lives.
Now that her warm mothers' body is his wife,
she held him the way my tires held the ice,
and he held her the way a man holds
a half empty beer,
with his fingertips and away from his ribs.

[LadyRae]

I read this in HighLights for Children and it made me think of your post, Leonis.

Have You Ever Eaten A Poem?

Have you ever eaten a poem?
Have you ever taken a bite?
Swallowed the words and felt them
Tickle as they went down?
Have you ever baked a poem?
Pie with the words all moist
And hot inside?
Well, take my word for it,
I've eaten poetry before,
And I'm sure you will like it!

By Jazmin Simmons, age ten



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Proprietor of The Moon's Hope Inn
Smitten by The.Relic

[Leonis]

get it do Yorick,
my name is not Warrick,
working the problem not mine
but dollars, convenience, time

when here are you
still have i work to do
for if i earn coin not
my bones shall surely rot

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promise i'll have something better soon...




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Grrrr!

[LadyRae]

Hey, it's not a crime to not rhyme you know
Sometimes if the words flow and the feelings grow
you'll find yourselves enchanting elves
with lovely tunes like bright balloons...
*FIZZLE*

Whoops! Sorry!
Yorick? You lurking? Aw, you can take that silly tin helmet off... I promise I won't whack you! She uncrosses toes and fingers. Yeah, okay, I won't whack you with a newpaper!

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Proprietor of The Moon's Hope Inn
Smitten by The.Relic

[Leonis]

I love it LadyRae!

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Careful;
They are whispering soft lies,
Deceptively sweet,
With their gorgeous lips
Into your ready ear.

They are removing that
Preciously warm protective wax
With those strong
Forked tongues
And replacing it with dirty wool.

Of course, with that
Comes the ever present,
Persistent maggot.

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Grrrr!

[Dog of War]

Broken

I see your eyes and I am lost
I feel your breath and desire fills my lips
Your voice echoes in my mind
Your touch makes me shake
I am broken within

[Yorick]

Originally posted by LadyRae: Hey, it's not a crime to not rhyme you know Sometimes if the words flow and the feelings grow you'll find yourselves enchanting elves with lovely tunes like bright balloons... *FIZZLE* Whoops! Sorry! Yorick? You lurking? Aw, you can take that silly tin helmet off... I promise I won't whack you! She uncrosses toes and fingers. Yeah, okay, I won't whack you with a newpaper!

I don't believe any of us implied it was Ladyrae

There is a certain satisfaction to be had in crafting words in an interesting and edible way, and using rhyme - and the absense of it when expected - plus moving the rhymes, alliterations and word plays around and in and out of standard patterns. As Leonis said, it is the flow of the words that is important - but not needing rhyme shouldn't be mistaken for ignoring and/or disdaining rhyme. A lover of words should love the flow. Sometimes rhyme helps the flow, other times it is unecessary.

For the record I am a big fan of Leonis' flow, constructions and content.



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"Check the sustain on this one ... aaaaaaaa, I mean you could go out for a bite and there'd still be aaaaaaaaa"

"Can I touch it?"
"No. It can't be played"
"Can I look at it?
"No we've seen enough of that one....."


A fair dinkum laughing Hyena!

[LadyRae]

Yorick!
That's why I wrote it, silly! It's a rhyme about rhymes! Guess I coulda finished it but I thought the *FIZZLE* was funny!

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Proprietor of The Moon's Hope Inn
Smitten by The.Relic

[Yorick]

I think the saying "anything goes" is what I was after. Enjoying the posts guys!!!!

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"Check the sustain on this one ... aaaaaaaa, I mean you could go out for a bite and there'd still be aaaaaaaaa"

"Can I touch it?"
"No. It can't be played"
"Can I look at it?
"No we've seen enough of that one....."


A fair dinkum laughing Hyena!

[Yorick]

Originally posted by LadyRae: Yorick! That's why I wrote it, silly! It's a rhyme about rhymes! Guess I coulda finished it but I thought the *FIZZLE* was funny!

Well whack me on the head and call me a knob. How could I have missed that.