Fragments of Humanity, Sanctuary II - Page 2

Reeka · 06-15-2001, 04:28 PM

Hi, Bahumet and Jerome!

Thanks guys, for the sneak pre-view I got of most of these poems. I really and seriously feel privileged.

I have also already told you guys what I think of them. But to reiterate, I enjoy the poetry the both of you write very much. Technique can be learned, but depth of feeling and allowing others insights into your souls cannot be learned. That must come from within.

Ryan, thanks for starting this again. I can't wait to read your next ones. And sneak pre-views are always appreciated.

*HUGS* Guys!

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O_H_F

Charean · 06-15-2001, 04:33 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Bahamut:
I wish I can feel your embrace
The warmth, love and its sweetness
To hold your silky hand
Is to hold heaven itself
Your beating heart-slow but sure
Next to mine-jumping with excitement
Our breaths mingle in the humid air
Inhales of ecstasy
Exhales of care
Movements of Love...

I love this...

Both of you show a lot of talent...let me know when you publish!

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Defender for the Light -
Goodness knows there is a lot of Dark out there!! - Where are my matches?!?
Wandering Soul - Finding my life's calling is Bodhisattva
You are what your deep driving desire is; As your deep driving desire is, so is your will; As your will is so is your deed; As your deed is so is your destiny.
The Upanishads

Reeka · 06-16-2001, 03:03 AM

Bumping for our poets!

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O_H_F

Gridlock · 06-16-2001, 04:55 AM

Finally finally finally. That is all I can say as of the moment. Finally, you've come to your senses. I know I was prety harsh with you back there, but you have to understand that I think highly of the talent you have. Not worth keeping from other people, especially when others would kill to have it too. Keep on writing Ryan, you're good at it. Believe me.

Here's my own contribution. I warn you, it's sad.

ANDREW

My son…
I hope you don’t mind if I start rambling again

Emily came by today
Ah… sweet Emily…
We looked at your photo album and laughed together
But her smile didn’t quite reach her eyes

“Come on baby, you can do it!”
“Ma… ma…”
“Oh baby! You did it!”

The six year old boy down the street
I can’t seem to remember his name
He doesn’t ride his bike around anymore
He says only Andy can fix his bike

“Mom, I’ve enlisted in the army.”
I willed for the tears to stop
And I turned my face away.

Every night, I light a candle
And think of the day that’s just ended
I close my eyes and wish to hear your voice
But not a sound ever comes

“I’m sorry Ma’am… he got hit…”
“I’m sorry…”
Not Andy… not my son…

A year’s gone by
Everyone misses you terribly

The six year old boy down the street

Emily

Me

“Mommy, good night kiss?”

Good night Andy.

Mommy loves you.

bilqis · 06-16-2001, 02:21 PM

WOW!

Bravo!! I'm so glad to see this thread up and running again!! Hear hear!! Encore!

More please.

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Having abandoned my
search for truth, I am
now looking for a good
fantasy.

Bahamut · 06-16-2001, 02:21 PM

thanx reeka again!!!

i have to give the rhyming part to jerome!!! but im tha love man!!! teehee

ey griddy gurl!!! long time!!! thanx for saying finally! at least i know that i have been determined to squash the freaks!

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You know what happened. We are ONE, WE ARE, ahh.. er... I AM 'S favorite pet pea-cock...teehee and... Stay ahead of the Avalanche or risk being buried...

Reeka · 06-16-2001, 05:03 PM

Your welcome, anytime, Ryan!

Gridlock, absolutely beautiful. Really.

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O_H_F

Gridlock · 06-17-2001, 09:29 AM

Another one:

JOURNEY TO THE UNKNOWN

Vast empty expanse
Of white linoleum
Faces us as we journey to the unknown.
Always forward
Never right nor left.
They come towards us
From the opposite direction.
Their leader pauses
To kiss the head of our line.
A kiss bearing top-secret information
“Another barricade of poisonous powder.
One of our men died just stepping on it.”
The wind carries the words to all of us,
Yet we move forward
Always forward.
But what is to the left and right?
More white,
More emptiness,
Made more alluring by its difference in direction.
I turn and march to the right.
“Hey, where are you going?”
I don’t know either.
But won’t it be fun to find out?
I zigzag left and right,
Weaving through the ghosts in my head.
Oblivious to the flesh monument falling from the sky,
I never saw it coming.
The vast white expanse stretches towards me.
White…
“Oh God.”
Gray…
“I knew him when…”
Black.

I wonder if you guys got what that was about...

Bahamut · 06-17-2001, 09:29 AM

The difference between love and hate is Paper thin...

some goof said this, but i dont know his name
(Ruruouni Kenshin OAV)

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Yukishiro Tomoe protected her happines by sacrificing herself- I will do the same

Stay ahead of the Avalanche or risk being buried...

Bahamut · 06-17-2001, 09:38 AM

bah... must rest.. too much math...

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Yukishiro Tomoe protected her happines by sacrificing herself- I will do the same

Stay ahead of the Avalanche or risk being buried...

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06-15-2001, 04:28 PM	#11
Reeka Ma'at - Goddess of Truth & Justice Join Date: March 2, 2001 Location: Birmingham, Alabama, USA Age: 70 Posts: 3,255	Hi, Bahumet and Jerome! Thanks guys, for the sneak pre-view I got of most of these poems. I really and seriously feel privileged. I have also already told you guys what I think of them. But to reiterate, I enjoy the poetry the both of you write very much. Technique can be learned, but depth of feeling and allowing others insights into your souls cannot be learned. That must come from within. Ryan, thanks for starting this again. I can't wait to read your next ones. And sneak pre-views are always appreciated. HUGS Guys! ------------------ O_H_F

06-16-2001, 03:03 AM	#13
Reeka Ma'at - Goddess of Truth & Justice Join Date: March 2, 2001 Location: Birmingham, Alabama, USA Age: 70 Posts: 3,255	Bumping for our poets! ------------------ O_H_F

06-16-2001, 04:55 AM	#14
Gridlock Elite Waterdeep Guard Join Date: June 3, 2001 Location: Philippines Posts: 20	Finally finally finally. That is all I can say as of the moment. Finally, you've come to your senses. I know I was prety harsh with you back there, but you have to understand that I think highly of the talent you have. Not worth keeping from other people, especially when others would kill to have it too. Keep on writing Ryan, you're good at it. Believe me. Here's my own contribution. I warn you, it's sad. ANDREW My son… I hope you don’t mind if I start rambling again Emily came by today Ah… sweet Emily… We looked at your photo album and laughed together But her smile didn’t quite reach her eyes “Come on baby, you can do it!” “Ma… ma…” “Oh baby! You did it!” The six year old boy down the street I can’t seem to remember his name He doesn’t ride his bike around anymore He says only Andy can fix his bike “Mom, I’ve enlisted in the army.” I willed for the tears to stop And I turned my face away. Every night, I light a candle And think of the day that’s just ended I close my eyes and wish to hear your voice But not a sound ever comes “I’m sorry Ma’am… he got hit…” “I’m sorry…” Not Andy… not my son… A year’s gone by Everyone misses you terribly The six year old boy down the street Emily Me “Mommy, good night kiss?” Good night Andy. Mommy loves you.

06-16-2001, 02:21 PM	#15
bilqis Symbol of Cyric Join Date: March 1, 2001 Location: WA, USA Age: 67 Posts: 1,328	WOW! Bravo!! I'm so glad to see this thread up and running again!! Hear hear!! Encore! More please. ------------------ Having abandoned my search for truth, I am now looking for a good fantasy.

06-16-2001, 02:21 PM	#16
Bahamut Iron Throne Cult Join Date: March 12, 2001 Location: Manila, Philippines Age: 39 Posts: 4,864	thanx reeka again!!! i have to give the rhyming part to jerome!!! but im tha love man!!! teehee ey griddy gurl!!! long time!!! thanx for saying finally! at least i know that i have been determined to squash the freaks! ------------------ You know what happened. We are ONE, WE ARE, ahh.. er... I AM 'S favorite pet pea-cock...teehee and... Stay ahead of the Avalanche or risk being buried...

06-16-2001, 05:03 PM	#17
Reeka Ma'at - Goddess of Truth & Justice Join Date: March 2, 2001 Location: Birmingham, Alabama, USA Age: 70 Posts: 3,255	Your welcome, anytime, Ryan! Gridlock, absolutely beautiful. Really. ------------------ O_H_F

06-17-2001, 09:29 AM	#18
Gridlock Elite Waterdeep Guard Join Date: June 3, 2001 Location: Philippines Posts: 20	Another one: JOURNEY TO THE UNKNOWN Vast empty expanse Of white linoleum Faces us as we journey to the unknown. Always forward Never right nor left. They come towards us From the opposite direction. Their leader pauses To kiss the head of our line. A kiss bearing top-secret information “Another barricade of poisonous powder. One of our men died just stepping on it.” The wind carries the words to all of us, Yet we move forward Always forward. But what is to the left and right? More white, More emptiness, Made more alluring by its difference in direction. I turn and march to the right. “Hey, where are you going?” I don’t know either. But won’t it be fun to find out? I zigzag left and right, Weaving through the ghosts in my head. Oblivious to the flesh monument falling from the sky, I never saw it coming. The vast white expanse stretches towards me. White… “Oh God.” Gray… “I knew him when…” Black. I wonder if you guys got what that was about...

06-17-2001, 09:38 AM	#20
Bahamut Iron Throne Cult Join Date: March 12, 2001 Location: Manila, Philippines Age: 39 Posts: 4,864	bah... must rest.. too much math... ------------------ Yukishiro Tomoe protected her happines by sacrificing herself- I will do the same Stay ahead of the Avalanche or risk being buried...

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