Not really a masterpiece, but..

uss · 05-19-2004, 04:44 PM

..My very first submission.

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/7403995/

05-19-2004, 05:26 PM

amazing....really, good

but you still could do better...

the nose is too high, the face is too circular

and the hair is too light :-p

it'd be awesome!
not that it isn't right now!!

RoSs_bg2_rox · 05-19-2004, 05:36 PM

cool, I like it. my only comment would be the nose, needs a bit of work. Also great choice of paper to draw it on

Apart from that, great!

uss · 05-20-2004, 01:03 AM

Ok, I'll work on it when I get back from school(15-20 hours later)

uss · 05-20-2004, 08:24 AM

So, I'm back! I forgot to say thanks for the comments!

Hehhe, the paper is a page from my Geography notebook.

I'll try to change the nose and darken the hair to see how it works out. [img]smile.gif[/img]

What do you mean exactly, by the face being too circular? You mean that the head should be longer?

By the way, I personally, am not interested in modifying artwork with Photoshop, so I draw only by hand.

uss · 05-20-2004, 10:57 AM

Heey, submission done!

I narrowed the nose, making it have a less 'pointy' feel, darkened the hair and made it longer in some parts, darkened the eyebrows and dark stuff under the eyes(which were barely noticable before), redrew the bones under the neck, sharpened the eyes, made the neck-touching part of the kimono tippy, and did some other changes also. [img]smile.gif[/img]

You can look at them both at once to compare them. Anyway, here it is:

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/7423191/

[ 05-20-2004, 10:57 AM: Message edited by: uss ]

Bozos of Bones · 05-20-2004, 11:44 AM

Good. Great!
Eagerly expecting more...

Sythe · 05-23-2004, 07:29 PM

The hair is the best!

Sir Goulum · 06-06-2004, 10:50 PM

He looks a little frazzled. Is it a windy day there?

Looks good. [img]smile.gif[/img]

05-19-2004, 05:36 PM	#3
RoSs_bg2_rox Zartan Join Date: May 20, 2003 Location: Near Aberdeen, Scotland Age: 35 Posts: 5,225	cool, I like it. my only comment would be the nose, needs a bit of work. Also great choice of paper to draw it on Apart from that, great! __________________ [img]\"http://img.ranchoweb.com/images/ladyzekke/dragonwater2.gif\" alt=\" - \" />

05-20-2004, 11:44 AM	#7
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05-23-2004, 07:29 PM	#8
Sythe Ra Join Date: May 19, 2002 Location: The US of A Age: 36 Posts: 2,365	The hair is the best! __________________ Slythe is back! Back again! Haha! <br /><br />[url]\"http://imageshack.us\" target=\"_blank\"> [img]\"http://img472.imageshack.us/img472/9928/130blood4ts.jpg\" alt=\" - \" /></a>

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05-19-2004, 04:44 PM	#1
uss 20th Level Warrior Join Date: November 16, 2001 Location: Estonia Age: 36 Posts: 2,775	..My very first submission. http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/7403995/

05-19-2004, 05:26 PM	#2
Spirits forever Guest Posts: n/a	amazing....really, good but you still could do better... the nose is too high, the face is too circular and the hair is too light :-p it'd be awesome! not that it isn't right now!!

05-20-2004, 01:03 AM	#4
uss 20th Level Warrior Join Date: November 16, 2001 Location: Estonia Age: 36 Posts: 2,775	Ok, I'll work on it when I get back from school(15-20 hours later)

05-20-2004, 08:24 AM	#5
uss 20th Level Warrior Join Date: November 16, 2001 Location: Estonia Age: 36 Posts: 2,775	So, I'm back! I forgot to say thanks for the comments! Hehhe, the paper is a page from my Geography notebook. I'll try to change the nose and darken the hair to see how it works out. [img]smile.gif[/img] What do you mean exactly, by the face being too circular? You mean that the head should be longer? By the way, I personally, am not interested in modifying artwork with Photoshop, so I draw only by hand.

05-20-2004, 10:57 AM	#6
uss 20th Level Warrior Join Date: November 16, 2001 Location: Estonia Age: 36 Posts: 2,775	Heey, submission done! I narrowed the nose, making it have a less 'pointy' feel, darkened the hair and made it longer in some parts, darkened the eyebrows and dark stuff under the eyes(which were barely noticable before), redrew the bones under the neck, sharpened the eyes, made the neck-touching part of the kimono tippy, and did some other changes also. [img]smile.gif[/img] You can look at them both at once to compare them. Anyway, here it is: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/7423191/ [ 05-20-2004, 10:57 AM: Message edited by: uss ]

06-06-2004, 10:50 PM	#9
Sir Goulum John Locke Join Date: February 7, 2002 Location: Edmonton, Canada Age: 36 Posts: 8,985	He looks a little frazzled. Is it a windy day there? Looks good. [img]smile.gif[/img]

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