A story because I bored.

Gabriel · 11-18-2002, 11:04 PM

The rain fell heavy on my around me as I walked alone. It was a quite night devoid of the sound of man and beast, filled with just the soft whistle the wind blowing through the trees nearby. Contently I sighed and decided to rest here till morning, dropping to the ground I pull the brim of my hat down and watched the rain roll of the edge. A scream and the harsh sound many foot falls stirred my thoughts and a women collapsed beside me, her cloths were all but ripped from her and she bled from many wounds covering her body. "Please help! They killed my husband and attacked my daughter an....." The strange words meant nothing to me, a whimper came from behind her, a young girl. She looked no older the twelve seasons and seemed no better then the woman. Rising to my feet I turn from them facing the people from who they ran, slowly drawing my knives I pounced. My first knife found a home in a throat, blood pulsed along it length, the second between some ribs a quite hiss escaped the wound. My teachings of the human form lead my strokes, a nip here an arm fell limp, a slash there caused a fountain of blood. My blades moved through the air slowly before my eyes, the moon light shinning off their sides. It was like I watched the fight from some else’s body, the way the flesh parted before the tips of the knives, the sweet scent of blood, the screams of pain. I fought to push such thought from mind and to concentrate on the melee before me. A sword broke through the night, it edge cutting the silk of my outfit. Thrusting a knife to block I found a broken wooden shaft in it place, probability a axe handle I mused as the shattered remains of his eye pulsed over the socket. Pulling the sword from my last victims hands I brought it in a underhand grip across the gut of one and forward the blade finding a new sheath in another’s skull, hungrily I watched the life pour from her eyes and knew no more, my body lost to the dance of violence.
I awoke to the dawn sun, I found myself naked, the bodies to those I fought laying around me. The taste of blood filled my mouth and covered my neck and lower arms, slowly I rose to my feet and looked for the people I helped. Both were close by the child huddled over the women’s unmoving, naked form, dead. "Who?" I asked as best I could. The girl crawled away as I approached, her legs looks battered and a trail of blood run down the thigh but apart from that her body seemed no worse then last night. Fear showed in her face when she looked at me and tears randown her checks. Carefully I gathered what remained of my tattered clothing and collected my pack, leaving a crude map to civilisation and some food for the child and set out. Hopefully this day will turn out better for me and the creature with in will not waken but a last night had shown this isn't the time for a woman, let alone a half naked one, to be on the road.

/)eathKiller · 11-19-2002, 11:47 AM

ah nothing like a little wanton violent story to start your day...

nice work...

Horatio · 11-19-2002, 12:21 PM

Cool, they brought out my biography

Redblueflare · 11-19-2002, 05:53 PM

Very, very, cool fight scene. Do you enjoy gore or is it just me?

Ladyzekke · 11-19-2002, 06:07 PM

Hey! Why didn't you take the child to safety! Would if she can't read maps, ack! [img]tongue.gif[/img]

Pretty good Gabriel, although a bit gory LOL. [img]smile.gif[/img]

Gabriel · 11-19-2002, 07:51 PM

Ohh, comments!

It gory because the voilence kinda helps set up the subtext of the last bit (where she wakes up) or to distract from it.
Horatio- your a pycho woman then? Remind me never to annoy you.
LadyZ'- I don't think the girl would of come. ps Your Mia sort of inspired me to go with the fem' character.

Ladyzekke · 11-19-2002, 08:03 PM

Oh c'mon Gabriel! She easily would have followed the main character after being saved. She is alone now, and wounded, and if alone may get attacked again by others!

Aww, thanks, Mia's cool, I never get sick of looking at her LOL! [img]smile.gif[/img] Still miss your featherless wing guy dangit!

Ladyzekke · 11-19-2002, 08:05 PM

PS - Maybe you could continue the story where the main character doesn't realize it for a bit, but eventually notices that the one that's been following him wasn't an enemy, buuttt... [img]smile.gif[/img]

Gabriel · 11-19-2002, 08:22 PM

LadyZ, trust me the girl wants nothing to do with her. Why you ask well... If she killed all the bandits why are they all naked? The fear in the girls eyes when she looks at the main character and the blood should fill in the rest and get me a whole lot of trouble.
Kinda give the story a darker, sadder twist doesn't it.

To tell the truth, I just got sick of the dude and always liked the Sasami, Tsunami pic I got now or another of Ruri I found.

Ladyzekke · 11-19-2002, 08:29 PM

Well I'm still a bit confused, but I trust that given certain hints I may see what you mean re a darker side. Yikes! LOL, ahhh I'm always for stories that are adventurous, treacherous, sometimes bloody and gory, but also balanced out with something nice and good. Hence, why I posted my above reply, I was sneaking in my preferences as suggestions, which I guess I shouldn't have done really, as this is your story [img]smile.gif[/img]

11-19-2002, 11:47 AM	#2
/)eathKiller Dracolisk Join Date: January 5, 2002 Location: Guantanamo Bay, Cuba Age: 38 Posts: 6,043	ah nothing like a little wanton violent story to start your day... nice work... __________________ [img]\"http://membres.lycos.fr/th8or/ZeroSigForIronworks.gif\" alt=\" - \" /> o.o;

11-19-2002, 12:21 PM	#3
Horatio Ma'at - Goddess of Truth & Justice Join Date: September 19, 2001 Location: Behind these metal bars Age: 41 Posts: 3,117	Cool, they brought out my biography __________________ I <b>am</b> the party!!<br /> [img]\"http://zert0.net/iuti/img2/1381585-vi.gif\" alt=\" - \" />

11-19-2002, 05:53 PM	#4
Redblueflare Galvatron Join Date: May 9, 2001 Location: The backwoods in Georgia sigh Age: 39 Posts: 2,151	Very, very, cool fight scene. Do you enjoy gore or is it just me? __________________ <br /><br />\"If you ever need me just whistle, and i\'ll come running. I promise. <img border=\"0\" title=\"\" alt=\"[Smile]\" src=\"smile.gif\" /> <br />Kupo, Kupo! A man can\'t get a sword if he can\'t dance! <img border=\"0\" title=\"\" alt=\"[Big Grin]\" src=\"biggrin.gif\" />

11-19-2002, 06:07 PM	#5
Ladyzekke Ironworks Atomic Moderator Join Date: January 7, 2001 Location: Virginia, U.S.A. Age: 57 Posts: 9,005	Hey! Why didn't you take the child to safety! Would if she can't read maps, ack! [img]tongue.gif[/img] Pretty good Gabriel, although a bit gory LOL. [img]smile.gif[/img] __________________ Reality Show Recaps

11-19-2002, 08:03 PM	#7
Ladyzekke Ironworks Atomic Moderator Join Date: January 7, 2001 Location: Virginia, U.S.A. Age: 57 Posts: 9,005	Oh c'mon Gabriel! She easily would have followed the main character after being saved. She is alone now, and wounded, and if alone may get attacked again by others! Aww, thanks, Mia's cool, I never get sick of looking at her LOL! [img]smile.gif[/img] Still miss your featherless wing guy dangit! __________________ Reality Show Recaps

11-18-2002, 11:04 PM	#1
Gabriel Emerald Dragon Join Date: March 4, 2001 Location: England Age: 41 Posts: 920	The rain fell heavy on my around me as I walked alone. It was a quite night devoid of the sound of man and beast, filled with just the soft whistle the wind blowing through the trees nearby. Contently I sighed and decided to rest here till morning, dropping to the ground I pull the brim of my hat down and watched the rain roll of the edge. A scream and the harsh sound many foot falls stirred my thoughts and a women collapsed beside me, her cloths were all but ripped from her and she bled from many wounds covering her body. "Please help! They killed my husband and attacked my daughter an....." The strange words meant nothing to me, a whimper came from behind her, a young girl. She looked no older the twelve seasons and seemed no better then the woman. Rising to my feet I turn from them facing the people from who they ran, slowly drawing my knives I pounced. My first knife found a home in a throat, blood pulsed along it length, the second between some ribs a quite hiss escaped the wound. My teachings of the human form lead my strokes, a nip here an arm fell limp, a slash there caused a fountain of blood. My blades moved through the air slowly before my eyes, the moon light shinning off their sides. It was like I watched the fight from some else’s body, the way the flesh parted before the tips of the knives, the sweet scent of blood, the screams of pain. I fought to push such thought from mind and to concentrate on the melee before me. A sword broke through the night, it edge cutting the silk of my outfit. Thrusting a knife to block I found a broken wooden shaft in it place, probability a axe handle I mused as the shattered remains of his eye pulsed over the socket. Pulling the sword from my last victims hands I brought it in a underhand grip across the gut of one and forward the blade finding a new sheath in another’s skull, hungrily I watched the life pour from her eyes and knew no more, my body lost to the dance of violence. I awoke to the dawn sun, I found myself naked, the bodies to those I fought laying around me. The taste of blood filled my mouth and covered my neck and lower arms, slowly I rose to my feet and looked for the people I helped. Both were close by the child huddled over the women’s unmoving, naked form, dead. "Who?" I asked as best I could. The girl crawled away as I approached, her legs looks battered and a trail of blood run down the thigh but apart from that her body seemed no worse then last night. Fear showed in her face when she looked at me and tears randown her checks. Carefully I gathered what remained of my tattered clothing and collected my pack, leaving a crude map to civilisation and some food for the child and set out. Hopefully this day will turn out better for me and the creature with in will not waken but a last night had shown this isn't the time for a woman, let alone a half naked one, to be on the road.

11-19-2002, 07:51 PM	#6
Gabriel Emerald Dragon Join Date: March 4, 2001 Location: England Age: 41 Posts: 920	Ohh, comments! It gory because the voilence kinda helps set up the subtext of the last bit (where she wakes up) or to distract from it. Horatio- your a pycho woman then? Remind me never to annoy you. LadyZ'- I don't think the girl would of come. ps Your Mia sort of inspired me to go with the fem' character.

11-19-2002, 08:05 PM	#8
Ladyzekke Ironworks Atomic Moderator Join Date: January 7, 2001 Location: Virginia, U.S.A. Age: 57 Posts: 9,005	PS - Maybe you could continue the story where the main character doesn't realize it for a bit, but eventually notices that the one that's been following him wasn't an enemy, buuttt... [img]smile.gif[/img] __________________ Reality Show Recaps

11-19-2002, 08:22 PM	#9
Gabriel Emerald Dragon Join Date: March 4, 2001 Location: England Age: 41 Posts: 920	LadyZ, trust me the girl wants nothing to do with her. Why you ask well... If she killed all the bandits why are they all naked? The fear in the girls eyes when she looks at the main character and the blood should fill in the rest and get me a whole lot of trouble. Kinda give the story a darker, sadder twist doesn't it. To tell the truth, I just got sick of the dude and always liked the Sasami, Tsunami pic I got now or another of Ruri I found.

11-19-2002, 08:29 PM	#10
Ladyzekke Ironworks Atomic Moderator Join Date: January 7, 2001 Location: Virginia, U.S.A. Age: 57 Posts: 9,005	Well I'm still a bit confused, but I trust that given certain hints I may see what you mean re a darker side. Yikes! LOL, ahhh I'm always for stories that are adventurous, treacherous, sometimes bloody and gory, but also balanced out with something nice and good. Hence, why I posted my above reply, I was sneaking in my preferences as suggestions, which I guess I shouldn't have done really, as this is your story [img]smile.gif[/img] __________________ Reality Show Recaps

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