I wrote this...

250 · 09-22-2001, 10:04 PM

The eagle

Once upon a time there was a large moutainside where an eagle's nest was rested. The nest contained four large eagle eggs. One day, an earth quake shook the mountainside and one of the eggs fell down the cliff, to a chicken farm.

The chickens knew they should care and protect the egg, so one old hen volunteered to hatch the egg. One day, the egg hatched, and a beautiful eagle was born.

Sadly, however, the chickens disliked the eagle. They feared her for not only what she is, but also what potentials she may possesse. They taunted her, lied about her, hurt her, picked on her, isolated her, joked about her, ruined her colorful feathers, and hurt her beautiful wings, and fed lies to her that she was nothing but a chicken. The eagle believed that she was INDEED nothing but a chicken, but her spirit cried for what there is more in life!

She would look up in the sky and found a group of eagles soaring high above, and she would cry:" I wish I could soar like those birds!" The rest of the chickens raored with laughers: "HAHA, you cannot soar! you are a chicken!"

Then one day, came another he-eagle, who loved the she-eagle. He would often tell her the wonders he saw in the sky high above the chicken pit. He expressed his admirations and how much he loved her. He told her that she could fly too!

The she eagle was very angry, and she was hurt because she felt that she didn't deserve love. She cried:
"WHY DO YOU LOVE A CHICKEN?"

The he-eagle was sad, but said nothing. Instead, he led her to a cliff, and stood over the edge, said:
"come here, my love"

"No, I won't" she replied

"Come here, I love you." he said

"No, I am afraid." she resisted

"Come with me." he said

So she came over the edge, and he pushed her.

Then she flys!

[This message has been edited by 250 (edited 09-23-2001).]

Ed · 09-23-2001, 04:44 AM

very nice.....

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250 · 09-23-2001, 05:18 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Ed:
very nice.....

thx :-D

hope that encourages whoever in need

09-23-2001, 08:01 AM

I love eagles, they're so powerful, beautiful and majestic

You did some nice work there pal

Beaumanoir · 09-23-2001, 08:03 AM

*applause*

Very nice work there 250, very nice indeed

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250 · 09-23-2001, 08:07 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Beaumanoir:
*applause*

Very nice work there 250, very nice indeed

thanks

the person that I love suffered a similar and worse fate.

the original work, written by some unknown dude had a different ending
the eagle died by old age and never got a chance to redeem herself
I hated it, and it sucks. so I wrote this one

thanks for reading

Fljotsdale · 09-23-2001, 08:32 AM

An adaptation of the 'ugly duckling' story, but I like the eagle/chicken contrast better, lol!

Only one criticism - you need to do a little work on your understanding of English grammer! It will make your work SO much better. Hope you don't mind me mentioning it?

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250 · 09-23-2001, 08:36 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Fljotsdale:

Only one criticism - you need to do a little work on your understanding of English grammer! It will make your work SO much better. Hope you don't mind me mentioning it?

no, definately NO. I DONT mind AT ALL

give me some suggestions please?

by the way... the story had nothing to do with duckling, coincident/similarity, maybe, but hardly adaptaion

250 · 09-23-2001, 08:44 AM

Fljotsdale, help me out plz...

Lioness · 09-23-2001, 08:48 AM

Very nice too-fiffee.

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09-22-2001, 10:04 PM	#1
250 Horus - Egyptian Sky God Join Date: March 4, 2001 Location: either CA or MO Age: 42 Posts: 2,674	The eagle Once upon a time there was a large moutainside where an eagle's nest was rested. The nest contained four large eagle eggs. One day, an earth quake shook the mountainside and one of the eggs fell down the cliff, to a chicken farm. The chickens knew they should care and protect the egg, so one old hen volunteered to hatch the egg. One day, the egg hatched, and a beautiful eagle was born. Sadly, however, the chickens disliked the eagle. They feared her for not only what she is, but also what potentials she may possesse. They taunted her, lied about her, hurt her, picked on her, isolated her, joked about her, ruined her colorful feathers, and hurt her beautiful wings, and fed lies to her that she was nothing but a chicken. The eagle believed that she was INDEED nothing but a chicken, but her spirit cried for what there is more in life! She would look up in the sky and found a group of eagles soaring high above, and she would cry:" I wish I could soar like those birds!" The rest of the chickens raored with laughers: "HAHA, you cannot soar! you are a chicken!" Then one day, came another he-eagle, who loved the she-eagle. He would often tell her the wonders he saw in the sky high above the chicken pit. He expressed his admirations and how much he loved her. He told her that she could fly too! The she eagle was very angry, and she was hurt because she felt that she didn't deserve love. She cried: "WHY DO YOU LOVE A CHICKEN?" The he-eagle was sad, but said nothing. Instead, he led her to a cliff, and stood over the edge, said: "come here, my love" "No, I won't" she replied "Come here, I love you." he said "No, I am afraid." she resisted "Come with me." he said So she came over the edge, and he pushed her. Then she flys! [This message has been edited by 250 (edited 09-23-2001).]

09-23-2001, 04:44 AM	#2
Ed Manshoon Join Date: August 28, 2001 Location: London(ish) England Posts: 223	very nice..... ------------------ The REAL Minsc/Boo double act ..... Platinum Fighter of ALSB

09-23-2001, 08:01 AM	#4
Sorcerer Alex Guest Posts: n/a	I love eagles, they're so powerful, beautiful and majestic You did some nice work there pal

09-23-2001, 08:03 AM	#5
Beaumanoir Iron Throne Cult Join Date: June 3, 2001 Location: There is no IRL, Only AFK. Age: 35 Posts: 4,896	applause Very nice work there 250, very nice indeed ------------------ *Smoke Me A Kipper, I'll Be Back For Breakfast* *The Clan HADB Cleric Of Sephiroth + Jenova*

09-23-2001, 08:32 AM	#7
Fljotsdale Thoth - Egyptian God of Wisdom Join Date: March 12, 2001 Location: Birmingham, West Mid\'s, England Age: 87 Posts: 2,859	An adaptation of the 'ugly duckling' story, but I like the eagle/chicken contrast better, lol! Only one criticism - you need to do a little work on your understanding of English grammer! It will make your work SO much better. Hope you don't mind me mentioning it? ------------------

09-23-2001, 08:44 AM	#9
250 Horus - Egyptian Sky God Join Date: March 4, 2001 Location: either CA or MO Age: 42 Posts: 2,674	Fljotsdale, help me out plz...

09-23-2001, 08:48 AM	#10
Lioness Jack Burton Join Date: June 3, 2001 Location: Among the Stars Age: 36 Posts: 5,837	Very nice too-fiffee. ------------------ Lil' Angel Sword Saint and Enchantress of the HADB Clan Waitress at Cloudy's Cafe Bestest Mate of the Cyan Knight Lady of Jerome, The Fallen Paladin Honored Friend of the Warrior SSJ4Sephiroth, and the Arch-Mage Jafin PeaceKeeping Force, Intelligence Division

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