A Short Story - Page 2

Melusine · 12-04-2001, 04:28 PM

quote:
Originally posted by Jerome:

I would be eternally grateful if you could help me with the spelling and punctuation, I confess quite openly to being completely useless at the technical side of writing. [img]smile.gif[/img]

Jerome, of course! I proofread all my boyfriend's essays for his masters in English Lit so it's no problem at all! [img]smile.gif[/img]
Just send me the story in a Word doc! The address is the_new_helen@hotmail.com

I'd love to help out as this is one of the few stories I've read here that really impressed me [img]smile.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]

Jerome · 12-04-2001, 04:53 PM

quote:
Originally posted by Melusine:

Jerome, of course! I proofread all my boyfriend's essays for his masters in English Lit so it's no problem at all! [img]smile.gif[/img]
Just send me the story in a Word doc! The address is the_new_helen@hotmail.com

I'd love to help out as this is one of the few stories I've read here that really impressed me [img]smile.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]

Thanks Mel, I owe you. [img]smile.gif[/img]

Evil Al · 12-04-2001, 05:35 PM

Very good Jerome. Your description of the weather and the schools in Scotland was great. While I was reading the start of it I was thinking about the weather yesterday night. It was exactly how you described it. I dinna quite bide in Glasgee, I bide near Aberdeen. No jokes about sheep

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I wasn't expecting the ending it was very dramatic. You definitely have a career as a writer a head of you if you keep the good idea's flowing.

AzRaeL StoRmBlaDe · 12-04-2001, 08:33 PM

Good story, and I definitely don't say that often. It was very well constructed and it presented very stong imagery that I feel you used well. I have to say I enjoyed the underlying meaning in the story as well, as the story itself. I don't think any of us view all people as we should. Maybe that's something we should all be a little more subjective about.

Melusine · 12-05-2001, 04:33 AM

Jerome, I just sent you back the corrected copy yesterday night *yawns and rubs eyes*

Hope it will be of use to you [img]smile.gif[/img]

Jerome · 12-05-2001, 11:04 AM

quote:
Originally posted by Evil Al:
Very good Jerome. Your description of the weather and the schools in Scotland was great. While I was reading the start of it I was thinking about the weather yesterday night. It was exactly how you described it. I dinna quite bide in Glasgee, I bide near Aberdeen. No jokes about sheep .
I wasn't expecting the ending it was very dramatic. You definitely have a career as a writer a head of you if you keep the good idea's flowing.

LOL, it's a wonderful country to be in, ain't it?

Mel: THANK YOU! You're an angel! [img]smile.gif[/img]

Evil Al · 12-05-2001, 03:11 PM

quote:
Originally posted by Jerome:

LOL, it's a wonderful country to be in, ain't it?

Oh aye just great. Its funny that i only think that when i'm inside. Today it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey.

Jerome · 12-05-2001, 03:54 PM

quote:
Originally posted by Evil Al:

Oh aye just great. Its funny that i only think that when i'm inside. Today it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey.

I know... Scottish weather is great.... as long as you aren't the poor bugger that has to go out in it.

--being made to play football outside in weather like this is just evil..

Evil Al · 12-05-2001, 05:08 PM

quote:
Originally posted by Jerome:

--being made to play football outside in weather like this is just evil..

Lol, indeed it is very evil. PE teachers seem to like watching frozen peole play football on grass that feels more like rocks. I was really happy that i got a cup of tea while i was out side during my many smoke breaks today. I work across the road from the docks in Aberdeen and that just makes it colder.

Jerome · 12-05-2001, 05:15 PM

Ach, you don't know Mouse do you? He's another of our embittered Scots clan.... and he comes from Aberdeen too... *tries to withold sheep jokes* [img]tongue.gif[/img]

12-04-2001, 04:28 PM	#11
Melusine Dracolisk Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Amsterdam, The Netherlands Age: 43 Posts: 6,541	quote: Originally posted by Jerome: I would be eternally grateful if you could help me with the spelling and punctuation, I confess quite openly to being completely useless at the technical side of writing. [img]smile.gif[/img] Jerome, of course! I proofread all my boyfriend's essays for his masters in English Lit so it's no problem at all! [img]smile.gif[/img] Just send me the story in a Word doc! The address is the_new_helen@hotmail.com I'd love to help out as this is one of the few stories I've read here that really impressed me [img]smile.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img] __________________ [img]\"hosted/melusine.jpg\" alt=\" - \" /><br />Your voice is ambrosia

12-04-2001, 04:53 PM	#12
Jerome Knight of the Rose Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Scotland Age: 38 Posts: 4,418	quote: Originally posted by Melusine: Jerome, of course! I proofread all my boyfriend's essays for his masters in English Lit so it's no problem at all! [img]smile.gif[/img] Just send me the story in a Word doc! The address is the_new_helen@hotmail.com I'd love to help out as this is one of the few stories I've read here that really impressed me [img]smile.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img] Thanks Mel, I owe you. [img]smile.gif[/img] __________________ Psychos do not explode when hit by sunlight, no matter how crazy they are!

12-04-2001, 05:35 PM	#13
Evil Al Drow Warrior Join Date: October 5, 2001 Location: Aberdeen, United Kingdom Age: 38 Posts: 292	Very good Jerome. Your description of the weather and the schools in Scotland was great. While I was reading the start of it I was thinking about the weather yesterday night. It was exactly how you described it. I dinna quite bide in Glasgee, I bide near Aberdeen. No jokes about sheep . I wasn't expecting the ending it was very dramatic. You definitely have a career as a writer a head of you if you keep the good idea's flowing. __________________ I\'m not bigheaded but go here and tell me just how sexy i am [url]\"http://www.faceparty.com/al_the_drunkard\" target=\"_blank\">www.faceparty.com/al_the_drunkard</a><br /><br />War in iraq? Not in my name!<br /><br />Disarm America.

12-04-2001, 08:33 PM	#14
AzRaeL StoRmBlaDe Hathor Join Date: October 11, 2001 Location: At My Computer Age: 43 Posts: 2,217	Good story, and I definitely don't say that often. It was very well constructed and it presented very stong imagery that I feel you used well. I have to say I enjoyed the underlying meaning in the story as well, as the story itself. I don't think any of us view all people as we should. Maybe that's something we should all be a little more subjective about. __________________ Now the swinging bridge<br />Is quieted with creepers. . . <br />Like our tendrilled life. -Basho

12-05-2001, 04:33 AM	#15
Melusine Dracolisk Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Amsterdam, The Netherlands Age: 43 Posts: 6,541	Jerome, I just sent you back the corrected copy yesterday night yawns and rubs eyes Hope it will be of use to you [img]smile.gif[/img] __________________ [img]\"hosted/melusine.jpg\" alt=\" - \" /><br />Your voice is ambrosia

12-05-2001, 11:04 AM	#16
Jerome Knight of the Rose Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Scotland Age: 38 Posts: 4,418	quote: Originally posted by Evil Al: Very good Jerome. Your description of the weather and the schools in Scotland was great. While I was reading the start of it I was thinking about the weather yesterday night. It was exactly how you described it. I dinna quite bide in Glasgee, I bide near Aberdeen. No jokes about sheep . I wasn't expecting the ending it was very dramatic. You definitely have a career as a writer a head of you if you keep the good idea's flowing. LOL, it's a wonderful country to be in, ain't it? Mel: THANK YOU! You're an angel! [img]smile.gif[/img] __________________ Psychos do not explode when hit by sunlight, no matter how crazy they are!

12-05-2001, 03:11 PM	#17
Evil Al Drow Warrior Join Date: October 5, 2001 Location: Aberdeen, United Kingdom Age: 38 Posts: 292	quote: Originally posted by Jerome: LOL, it's a wonderful country to be in, ain't it? Oh aye just great. Its funny that i only think that when i'm inside. Today it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey. __________________ I\'m not bigheaded but go here and tell me just how sexy i am [url]\"http://www.faceparty.com/al_the_drunkard\" target=\"_blank\">www.faceparty.com/al_the_drunkard</a><br /><br />War in iraq? Not in my name!<br /><br />Disarm America.

12-05-2001, 03:54 PM	#18
Jerome Knight of the Rose Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Scotland Age: 38 Posts: 4,418	quote: Originally posted by Evil Al: Oh aye just great. Its funny that i only think that when i'm inside. Today it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey. I know... Scottish weather is great.... as long as you aren't the poor bugger that has to go out in it. --being made to play football outside in weather like this is just evil.. __________________ Psychos do not explode when hit by sunlight, no matter how crazy they are!

12-05-2001, 05:08 PM	#19
Evil Al Drow Warrior Join Date: October 5, 2001 Location: Aberdeen, United Kingdom Age: 38 Posts: 292	quote: Originally posted by Jerome: *--being made to play football outside in weather like this is just evil..* Lol, indeed it is very evil. PE teachers seem to like watching frozen peole play football on grass that feels more like rocks. I was really happy that i got a cup of tea while i was out side during my many smoke breaks today. I work across the road from the docks in Aberdeen and that just makes it colder. __________________ I\'m not bigheaded but go here and tell me just how sexy i am [url]\"http://www.faceparty.com/al_the_drunkard\" target=\"_blank\">www.faceparty.com/al_the_drunkard</a><br /><br />War in iraq? Not in my name!<br /><br />Disarm America.

12-05-2001, 05:15 PM	#20
Jerome Knight of the Rose Join Date: January 8, 2001 Location: Scotland Age: 38 Posts: 4,418	Ach, you don't know Mouse do you? He's another of our embittered Scots clan.... and he comes from Aberdeen too... tries to withold sheep jokes [img]tongue.gif[/img] __________________ Psychos do not explode when hit by sunlight, no matter how crazy they are!

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