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Well written! Very good visualization! A little final proofreading is all you need. I think you could easily continue this into a full story. Perhaps the brainy youth helps the burly fellow with his shortcomings and an unusual freindship blooms. Maybe his sister becomes enthralled with him. The parents may not like him. The gang may try to exact retribution. I can see dozens of paths leading from here. I've always wanted to try writing. Maybe you've given me a bug to dabble with it. Like I need another hobby!
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Master Barbsman and wielder of the razor wit!<br /><br />There are dark angels among us. They present themselves in shining raiment but there is, in their hearts, the blackness of the abyss.
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