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You got issues with constructive criticism there Erin. Everyone who posted took the time to read your work, digest it, and post thoughtful comments. And, you threw it back in their face. That's not a very appropriate way to react when you asked for help to begin with.
Everything everyone posted was good advice, by the way. Let me be clear here. What you don't need are more random examples to toss in the mix. You need clarity of writing and a good thorough grammar and spelling checker. Right now, the essay has nice thoughts, but is about what I'd expect to see from a college student given thirty minutes or an hour in class to write an essay. It's decent and intriguing, but not well-organized or complete. It needs serious work to be a take-home assignment that gets high marks.
But, you can take my advice or leave it. At the end of the day, it's your work, and it is your decision as to how much pride you will take in it.
As for us being lucky you looked at your books and told us the titles you were using as a reference, it was a little bit rude. It's a very unthankful attitude to take. It is actually you who are lucky, lucky that we are willing to review your work and help you make it better. Lucky we take the time. I could have billed a client .25 hours at $150/hr. while typing this post. You shouldn't scoff at us.
Welcome to Ironworks, fellow Chicagoan -- and good luck with the assignment.
[ 11-14-2003, 04:22 PM: Message edited by: Timber Loftis ]
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