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Mirac Honorguard · 10-06-2001, 08:47 AM

Very nice, this will make an good beginning. Now for the comments : (all comments I give are just my personal opinion )
You have a very good telling-style, keep it that way. If you want to make a full scale fantasy story btw, I would change "modern words" like university, it reminds me (personal opinion!!!!) to much of the time we live in now, in real life. Well, you have a great beginning, keep the good work up

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I'd be Mirac, mighty mage of er... uhm.. er.. - Mirac Honorguard
Fellow Table Dancer of the Jerome's Table dancer group
Spell formulater of the IW peace-keeping force

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10-06-2001, 08:47 AM	#6
Mirac Honorguard Red Wizard of Thay Join Date: August 21, 2001 Location: Limburg, Netherlands, Europe Age: 43 Posts: 894	Very nice, this will make an good beginning. Now for the comments : (all comments I give are just my personal opinion ) You have a very good telling-style, keep it that way. If you want to make a full scale fantasy story btw, I would change "modern words" like university, it reminds me (personal opinion!!!!) to much of the time we live in now, in real life. Well, you have a great beginning, keep the good work up ------------------ http://www.angelfire.com/rpg2/mirac I'd be Mirac, mighty mage of er... uhm.. er.. - Mirac Honorguard Fellow Table Dancer of the Jerome's Table dancer group Spell formulater of the IW peace-keeping force [This message has been edited by Mirac Honorguard (edited 10-06-2001).]