[Jerome]

Originally posted by Fljotsdale: You have a good vocabulary Jerome, and people have already pointed out things I was going to suggest. But - may I say it? - I was howling with laughter all the way through! I HOPE it meant to be a comedy? It reads like a great send-up of AD&D adventures! You should complete it! Leave in the 'devouring bottles'! Nice comic picture, that. You have an ability to create word pictures - we can SEE that scene in the pub! You need to tidy it up a little, but not too much.

Originally, It was ment to be serious as I could make it..

Unfortunatley i'd just finished reading a Terry Prachet novel and was influenced heavily... so what you see is something in the middle. I'll probably rewrite to make it serious later on... but for now it'll stand as it is.



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Within the jungle of my deepest emotion,
With a coat resplendant in a golden sheen,
Swiftly hunting my tender love,
Stalks the regal, Feline Queen