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Old 09-24-2001, 09:25 AM   #3
Jerome
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Join Date: January 8, 2001
Location: Scotland
Age: 39
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Quote:
Originally posted by DragonMage:


2. Also, after "devouring bottles and glasses" add something like "of alcohol" or change it to "downing bottles and glasses of alcohol". If you leave it as is, it seems that they are EATING the bottles and glasses.



LMAO! Diddn't I mention that they hadn't eaten in days?

Many thanks for the suggestions!


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