Hey, Wolfgir, That's a Brilliant story
, but one bit of advice, put more Speech marks in when people are talking cos it gets a bit confusing in places, for example:
'The paladin thought for awhile and lowered his sword, -Nay, I will not fight thee until I have heard thy story'
Would probably be a bit easier to read if you put in Speech Marks eg:
'The paladin thought for awhile and lowered his sword, "Nay, I will not fight thee until I have heard thy story." '
But you deffinitely don't have to take my advice, Its fairly easy to read without the anyway
. And anyway, I don't really have any idea when it comes to writing stories, I'm terrible at it
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Nicodemus Deathslayer, Paladin and Undead Hunter of the Order of the Holy Flame