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Shadowstrider · 06-16-2001, 07:47 PM

I recently open a "storytelling" board on my forums. If you would do me the honour of visiting and reading the story and posting a critique(here or there, depending on if you want to/are registered).

The link is here
or
http://www.strider.worldzone.net/cgi...rum=13&topic=2
there^^

Thanks for reading, and/or the response in advance.
=D

P.S. Please bear in mind typos may happen, so if you see an error please quote it so thst i may render it. =P

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I am YOUR omega.
Strider's Chambers - My website about roleplaying. Under HEAVY development.
The Shadow Network - My fairly well developed roleplaying community. Roleplaying open to everyone.

NOBODY expects the Spanish Inquisition! Our chief weapon is surprise...surprise and fear...fear and surprise.... Our two weapons are fear and surprise...and ruthless efficiency.... Our *three* weapons are fear, surprise, and ruthless efficiency...and an almost fanatical devotion to the Pope.... Our *four*...no... *Amongst* our weapons.... Amongst our weaponry...are such elements as fear, surprise.... I'll come in again.

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06-16-2001, 07:47 PM	#1
Shadowstrider Manshoon Join Date: May 1, 2001 Location: Demiplane of Shadow Posts: 248	I recently open a "storytelling" board on my forums. If you would do me the honour of visiting and reading the story and posting a critique(here or there, depending on if you want to/are registered). The link is here or http://www.strider.worldzone.net/cgi...rum=13&topic=2 there^^ Thanks for reading, and/or the response in advance. =D P.S. Please bear in mind typos may happen, so if you see an error please quote it so thst i may render it. =P ------------------ I am YOUR omega. Strider's Chambers - My website about roleplaying. Under HEAVY development. The Shadow Network - My fairly well developed roleplaying community. Roleplaying open to everyone. NOBODY expects the Spanish Inquisition! Our chief weapon is surprise...surprise and fear...fear and surprise.... Our two weapons are fear and surprise...and ruthless efficiency.... Our three weapons are fear, surprise, and ruthless efficiency...and an almost fanatical devotion to the Pope.... Our four...no... Amongst our weapons.... Amongst our weaponry...are such elements as fear, surprise.... I'll come in again. [This message has been edited by Shadowstrider (edited 06-16-2001).]