Just read this for the first time RudeDawg. 'Tis good. I'm interested in the characters. Let's see the next part!
I hesitate to offer any criticism, 'cause your fans will slay me...!
BUT - I would like to see the story filled out a little more - and you need to do a bit of editing and polishing. However, you have the makings of a very, very good story here. KEEP IT GOING! I can see it getting darker.....!
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