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Looking good, and I'm also ready for more, just one thing.
"It was a windy day and the nearness of the road to the desert showed it."
There is something about that, it just doesn't sound proper and fit in with your writing style, if I were you I would consider rephrasing it.
Maybe something like:
"it was a windy day and the closeness of the road and/with the desert showed it"
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