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Old 09-17-2002, 05:59 PM   #13
Tiresius
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Join Date: June 4, 2002
Location: The Nine Hells
Age: 39
Posts: 85
Hey magnetism, i believe you may have some an error in your sig:
"Magneticus prefers-like a cat-to play with a mouse that squeeks."

As is stands right now causes confusion for the reader.
1) it is innitially unclear as to what is "like a cat"
2) your predicate "prefers to play" has been broken up with an apposative and you would want to avoid this.
3) and as a minor gramatical error, a dash is 2 hyphens.

I personally would write the sentence as follows:
"Magneticus--like a cat--prefers to play with a mouse that squeeks."

That is just something that i noticed. After just finishing a 12 page symposium for AP American Literature, you just kind of notice things like that. Normally i'm not picky about internet ligo, but since that is in your sig you may want to correct that.
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