Little correction on Kaltia's correction
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Corsion tried to save his cousin, but, unfortunatly, it was a helpless cause; a few minutess after he told his story, he collapsed due to the severe wounds inflicted by the Surkari Guards.
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unfortunately, not unfortunatly.
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He found his cousin battered, helpless and severaly wounded, lying on the filthy ground.
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severely, not severaly.
There are several run-on sentences in the description too (e.g.
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This purple glowing blade was forged by a Kara-Turan Wo Jen of considerable powers, Corsion, the creator of this blade made it for one purpose only, avenging his family.
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