[Annatar]

I need your help guys, on my english.. storywriting and stats for this katana I made up (I will use it eventually... just need to find someone that can make it for me [img]smile.gif[/img] )

Here is it's history

Sortaghion +5: The Essence This purple glowing blade was forged by a Kara-Turan Wo Jen of considerable powers, Corsion, the creator of this blade made it for one purpose only, avenging his family. Kerilioco Sinonus. Corsion’s family was killed in a raid organised by Kerilioco, the men of the cruel warlord invaded the village of Corsion, they plundered and killed all the inhabitants of the small and peaceful village, including the family of the Kara-Turan Wo Jen. Corsion was devastated when he found out his family was butchered, he scurried throw the burned down village to seek survivors, if there were any he thought He found his cousin, battered and helpless laying down on the filthy ground severely wounded. He explained what happened, he tried to defend himself… though it did not have effect, he managed to kill four of the Elite Surkari Guards that Kerilioco hired to defend him, the fight was fierce and he got hit three time’s.. he survived the merchaniery’s, but then Kerlilioco stepped up and said to him ‘’for this, you and your family will pay a cruel price, nobody stands up to me and my men, we are the law in this region and all will obey to my leadership!!’’ Kerilioco stepped away and commanded his men to torch down the village, let this be a lesson to all who try to oppose me! Kerilioco and his men where ruthless and they torched down the entire village, leaving me for death. They had no mercy for the weak… he said, they slaughtered men, woman and children if they were all alike, showing no mercy. Corsion tried to save his cousin, it was a helpless case, a few minutes’s after he tolled his story.. he collapsed due to the severe wounds inflicted by the Surkari Guards. Soon after, Corsion buried his family.. after a month of mourning, he sought reuvege in a near by town. Before he buried his family, he took of each family member two drops of blood.. with a ritual of the darkest magic he stored there souls in those two drops of blood, knowing of with he had to do. He stored their Essence. He took his family blade, a katana that exceeded above any other of his kind.. and began enchanting the almost perfect sword, it took him a long time to break down the katana, it is not easy to enchant an already magical katana.. they are near perfect swords that are wielded by powerful warriors, this sword once belong to a great fighter.. a relative of the Kiro No Cen family, the same blood runs throw Corsions vanes.. he inherit aged this sword from his father, who got it from his father… and so forth. After 2 years of forging and enchanting the katana… was almost ready, he heated up the blade and carved the initials of all his family members that died in his village, he took the blood that he preserved, and infused it with the carvings he made of every member of the Kiro No Cen. The blood soon dried up and let a trace of dark red in the curves in the katana blade. This process took 2 weeks until every initial was marked with its blood. Corsion used his own blood to coat the hilt red, there for making a band with his death relative’s, with this blood bond.. he made sure that if he dies… his soul would be captured in the blade, so that he can coexist with his family in the powers of the enchanted katana. With the blade ready, he made the journey to Kerilioco Sinonus his camp, just outside the great city of Sarodor, Kerilioco was planning to invade this great city for months.. he never made it.. Corsion soon identified Kerilioco in the camp, he walked towards him… rather calm and steady. Kerilioco was surprised to see a stranger in his eye’s in the middle of his camp and said ‘’Who dare’s to walk towards me, looking at me if he sees the devil himself… who are you, stranger?’’ Corsion pronounced his name ‘’I’m Corsion a Kara-Turan Wo Jen, the last member of the Kiro No Cen clan’’ Kerilioco was shoked from what he have heard and grasps to his sword ‘’ You are a member of the ever weak Kiro No Cen? A clan that I destroyed many years ago, because they opposed me… what is it that you want from me?’’ Corsion looked amazed by this and said ‘’You dare to ask what I want? It is your death that I wish… doing so to avenge my family that you killed in cold blood’’ Kerilioco was stunned and searched for words… ‘’This incident took place many years ago, you still seek revenge for this? This act of foolishness will have your death as an outcome… you do know this don’t you?’’ ‘’Death is the only thing I seek Kerilioco, I don’t have a meaning in life anymore, you took this from me 2 years ago.. when you orderd your men to kill my family, for this… you will pay with your own blood’’ When Corsion said this… he pulled out his family blade and ran towards Kerilioco… Corsion was granted the strength of the souls of his family members captured in the katana.. making him every fierce full and determined what to do.. he felt the power of the Kiro No Cen members flowing throw his vanes, he felt the pain, anger and hate from each member.. all focused on Kerilioco. Kerilioco struck his sword in Corsions chest.. Corsion didn’t even noticed it, Kerilioco was shocked when he pulled his sword out and saw the wound in Corsions chest disappear.. the souls captured in the blade healed Corsion, so that he can fulfil his destiny and destroy Kerilioco.. Corsion raised Sortaghion high up in the air and struck Kerilioco to the ground in one powerful blow, Kerilioco was gasping to air because the blow had hit his throat and a great part of his chest.. he was severely wounded, he begged Corsion for mercy, Corsion anwsered this request with a strike from his blade, decapitating Kerilioco.. Soldiers of the now death Kerilioco rushed to the scene, the heard the sound of battle and gatherd around Corsion.. Corsion, knowing that he will lose against the massive army of Kerilioco.. placed his family katana against his chest. Sortaghion gained another tortured soul, with the soul of Corsion in its blade.. it was even more powerful then it already was.. but at what price? What happened to the blade is not known, it has been sought by many collectors, kensai’s and samurai’s, for this blade is among the greatest of his kind.

I just wanted to have katana with a personal touch and some history... I looked at several Katana descriptions in the game (CF, Sanchu, Malakar, Dakkon)
And came up with this story... rather simple english.. and literally filled with typos ect.

Okay enough about my bad english... I need some stats to give this sword, maybe some edits to it's story... and another name, because Sortaghion is so common (i think [img]graemlins/1ponder.gif[/img] )

I know this is allot to ask... but I would really... like really appreciate some comments about it.. because it took me awhile to make it.

I'm looking forward to see all your reactions... [img]graemlins/hehe.gif[/img]



[ 04-05-2003, 12:30 PM: Message edited by: Annatar ]