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I have been thinking for a long time about writing my own story and basically I started today. I managed to write quite a lot and have gotten the prologue together. Basically it is going to be a sort of hybryd science-fiction/fantasy story, although science-fiction shall probably be more dominant.
What has been done so far: Prologue Chapter 1 Chapter 2 - Part 1 Chapter 2 - Part 2 Chapter 3 - Part 1 [ 11-21-2004, 04:58 PM: Message edited by: dplax ] |
Ruling so far. Eager for more!
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Looking good, and I'm also ready for more, just one thing.
"It was a windy day and the nearness of the road to the desert showed it." There is something about that, it just doesn't sound proper and fit in with your writing style, if I were you I would consider rephrasing it. Maybe something like: "it was a windy day and the closeness of the road and/with the desert showed it" |
Thanks for the reviews. I'll change that structure then Ross.
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Chapter 1 has been added! Thanks to Ross for proofreading it. It can be found here.
And a thank you also goes out to Bozos for helping with some of the technological stuff. [ 11-07-2004, 07:56 AM: Message edited by: dplax ] |
You're welcome from my part. I am eagerly awaiting chapter 2, and will be happy to proofread that too. [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]
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Hey, I've already got all the thanks I need with blowing up Earth. :D
Just read CHapter 1. Still eager for more. |
The story rocks dplax. [img]smile.gif[/img] I want more, more. [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]
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What was your favourite part of the story so far everyone?
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Well I loved the bit where there was the meeting between the mage's guild and the cultist guild represantant. It must have been the best bit there.
What do you think Xen? Bozos? |
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