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Sorry about that. Not trying to be abrasive Charlie, but you can't make cash on poetry, even if it is the kind that we should all read for emotional insight. If you wrote novels, now there's the money. Unless you put them in song, and it shakes that Russian song off the charts (Don't know what it's doing up their anyways, but then again I'm not British...) it won't make the kind of cash that you need to make a living of writing.

They're good Charlie :D I got some lyrics from my band but they may not be to suitable. Theres no swearing, but some innuendos and the odd thing ;)

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Originally posted by Oblivion437:
Sorry about that. Not trying to be abrasive Charlie, but you can't make cash on poetry, even if it is the kind that we should all read for emotional insight.

Who ever said cash was the only reason people create art?

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Originally posted by Charlie:
I shot a man Today

I shot a man today
A no one, someone out for fun,
said the wrong thing and met my gun,
now he's in the gutter and I'm on the run.

I shot a man today
Straight down in flames,
done nothing wrong but asked some names,
Wish I'd used my head, not lost my brains.

I shot a man today
Where do I go, the plot is lost and there's no show,
the lights and the candles have lost their glow,
the voice in the head says "told you so",
the youth are lost yet they don't know,
their bodies enabled but minds disabled,
thoughts all twisted like a ships old cables,
lost in the search for lie spun fables,
angry faces across dirty tables,
and screams and shouts and shots ringout,
who's the thug, who's the lout,
what's this violence all about,
mental or physical tis all the same,
always looking to pass the blame,
there is no winner in this ■■■■■■■ game,
you and I are just the same...
Just we don't always see it

I shot a man today
No fun, no happiness,
I shot him through my mental uselessness,
uncontrollable compulsiveness,
no prayers, no thoughts.... no goodnight, God bless,
the man was shot because he was a mess.

I shot a man today
because he couldn't see,
the man that I shot today...
.......... was me.

Brilliant.

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Originally posted by Yorick:
Brilliant.

Isn't it? I think it's fantastic. Really good work, Charlie.

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Originally posted by Yorick:

Brilliant.[/QUOTE]

Grand praise indeed, thankyou Yorick.
Also all the others that liked it.

Very, very, very well written Charlie. I really enjoyed it.

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Originally posted by Charlie:
</font><blockquote>Quote:</font><hr />Originally posted by Yorick:
Brilliant.

Grand praise indeed, thankyou Yorick.
Also all the others that liked it.</font>[/QUOTE]I'm tellin ya, you two ought to collaborate! [img]smile.gif[/img]

Once again Charlie, Awesome poem!

[ 03-17-2003, 10:04 AM: Message edited by: Nachtrafe ]