I'm not considering publishing dude. I'm just writing this story for fun, and so far it's been that. The people on that board told me to erase the "he" s and stuff. How would I "slow it down" ? Put an extra space between every word? [img]tongue.gif[/img]

Ooo, a forum for buddng writers! [img]smile.gif[/img] There's a large contingent of writing-types at IW... at last we see where they meet. There's some wonderfully written stuff here, folks.