the reason semi colons are there is because the grammar check on word said it should be...

There are lots of things you are not supposed to say. "You" and "some" being a few. Also, if this is formal writing (which I presume it isn't) all contractions would have to be spelt out. AND (is there an echo in here?), essays should be written in 3rd person, so "I" would become "the reader."

Sorry yes I meant you have commas where semi-colons are more appropriate. And don't trust your grammer check ;)

It's good Chris. [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img] Please add a space or two when you make a paragraph. :eek:

[ 11-11-2002, 10:34 PM: Message edited by: Redblueflare ]

Just blowing off some steam :D [/qb][/QUOTE]Heh I have an ancient history exam on Thursday - it's three essays of 800-1000 words each in two hours, or 40 minutes an essay. Lucky I write fast ;) [/QB][/QUOTE]
Does this mean that the test itself is a relic or artifact or is it a test on ancient history? :D Sorry; I couldn't resist. Blame it on too many theology and philosophy courses.
In the same vein, I would posit that belief is not wishy washy but the driving force in humans. Whether it is the scientists belief that there is an answer or the religious persons belief in a reason for life; belief is what causes us to search and strive.

Not knowing exactly what grade level this is for makes it hard to offer a fair evaluation. The advice that others have offered is good no matter the grade level. All of the advice given will make the essay better. If this is for middle school or high school then it is very good within the word constraint.

[ 11-11-2002, 10:39 PM: Message edited by: antryg ]

it is for science and language i believe, we got essay outlines from the language teacher and the content from our scince teacher, and ny the way it only had to be 500 words this is 800 or so.

Heh I have an ancient history exam on Thursday - it's three essays of 800-1000 words each in two hours, or 40 minutes an essay. Lucky I write fast ;) </font>[/QUOTE]I'm not an English buff, nor am I capable to formulate a detailed compilation of sources into a single essay when I am under such stress and aggravation. Planning is the key.

Hmm good job. I give it 3 thumbs up. [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img] [img]graemlins/thumbsup.gif[/img]

i changed the one sentence there that didnt fit in and has the religious controversy stuff, it was intially part of the intro, and i didnt realize the problem.

One thing you should know for future reference, if you ever have to present an essay/story of your own to the class, be sure to
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